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Looking for a story Anonymous 08/15/2018 (Wed) 02:43:31 Id:dc3671 No. 2919 [Reply]
I'm looking for a story, it was about two step sisters. One was already fat and her stepsister, step mother and father would talk shit about her in a group chat.

Well the orginal girl finds out about this and plots revenge on her stepsister. She'd take control of her stepsister has she slept and make her eat tons of food.

I forget where I read this and now I can't find it.

Immoblity 12/14/2016 (Wed) 02:11:09 No. 17 [Reply]
Anyone have any good stories involving immoblility?
i'll start with these two
http://gluttonousgastronomy.blogspot.com/
http://fantasyfeeder.com/stories/view?id=40530
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>>2858
No offense intended. But the thread is for immobiles, not moderate weight gain. As long as she can walk, she mobile
>>2873
Just me, but I’m okay with effectively immobile. If she can’t get out of bed without extraordinary accommodation, the point has been made and I want to read it

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Writing improvement eastsportman 01/14/2017 (Sat) 04:27:19 No. 304 [Reply]
Post stories for critiques, editing, or other help.

I found a video I'd like to share on the topic of better writing, a video from Brandon Sanderson, talking in one of his writing lectures.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N4ZDBOc2tX8
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Here's a little size description blurb I wrote not long ago, might or might not go into a story depending on what you guys think of it. Comments/suggestions welcome.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1M5rH8ZqZekkdxH-T25Pvpm5pxLhOLa4JWON0Onwxk0k/edit?usp=sharing
>>2889
Not bad. Your description is confident and conjures a solid image, if suffering somewhat from an excess of clichés ("tree trunk legs", "appeared painted on", "the size of softballs", etc.). It's obvious you have a good idea of what Sam looks like, and do well at communicating that to the reader.
The main thing holding your writing back are the consistent grammatical errors. You overuse hyphens and semicolons to a fault, resulting in sentences that are almost indecipherable - for example "Despite the irony, Sam was in every way a giant; that is, besides in height; though that didn’t seem to matter to him as it once did." Your opening sentence should be the strongest line you have, not a string of disjointed clauses that require multiple readings to even understand. To what irony are you even referring here? A man being giant in every dimension except vertical is not ironic.
Furthermore, you leap back and forth between past and present tense even within the same sentence ("Sam was in every way a giant", "Does it seem to you like he stands out?", "It was alarming that Sam… was on the lighter side", "Sam's shirt is so tight…" etc.), which is severely distracting. The narration also wanders into directly addressing the reader at one point, apparently at random ("Does it seem to you like he stands out? Well, you might be surprised…"), which clashes with the style of the rest of the story.

If you simply fix up your grammar, your writing would be immediately greatly improved - it's apparent that you have a particular writing style for which you're aiming that could be quite enjoyable to read if it came to fruition, it's just that your inconsistent grammar is forcing you to fall short.

I really don't get as much critiques as I would like, so a thread like this is wonderful.I re

Could someone critique one of recent ones, Ellie? I haven't really gotten as much feedback as I had hoped.

https://www.deviantart.com/fc-punk/art/Ellie-COMMISSION-WG-748985452
>>2893
You know I like your work, so I won't waste your time endlessly listing the stuff I enjoyed. I'll mention a few standouts, however; your description is excellent - better even than usual in this story, I might dare to say - the plot is robust and leads to some fun scenes, and I greatly enjoyed the themes you included. I always enjoy reading your stories, and even when they stray out of the realms of what I'm usually interested in, your writing style maintains my drive to read more.

The main thing holding your stories back in my opinion is how you deliver information to the reader. The adage 'show, don't tell' is thrown around a lot, but there's a reason for that; the advice is solid. When Ellie returns from school to see her father passed out, we don't need a line to tell us "She couldn’t stand her father, he was absolutely useless and was never there for her." We can infer that from the fact that he's drunk on vodka at four in the afternoon.
On a related note, you tend to front-load character description instead of letting us learn organically what the character is like through the story. The opening is especially bad for this - "Britney Maddox the red headed preppy student body president", "Ashley Banks the blonde captain of the cheer team who was almost always in uniform" and Hannah Zimmerman, the star athlete of the school with frizzy black hair" are all introduced consecutively. Omitting some of this description - do we really need to know their hair colours right now? - or at least spacing it out a little would eliminate the problem of having several clunky info-heavy sentences in a row right at the start of the story. If you really want to include the information that they're powerful bullies right at the start instead of leaving that to the reader's inference, consider a line that describes all three of the girls' positions at once - something along the lines of "The power trio contained three of the most influential girls in the school; Ashley Banks, the cheer captain, Britney Maddox, the student body president, and Hannah Zimmerman, the school's star athlete. Together, these three could get away with anything" or something like that.
Once the story gets going it really improves; it's only really the first part that suffers from this sort of clunky exposition. Simply spreading out the information, and allowing the reader to gather some details on their own, would much help the pacing of the first few pages.

The other main complaint I have is that many of the characters are rather cliché, or lack depth. Britney and Hannah are stock bully characters, the father doesn't even get a line, her mother is a typical mean-mom, and her brother is little more than a plot device. Ashley gains a little depth through the implication of her ulterior motives in fattening Ellie up, but it's really only a hint at greater depth. I liked Ellie's character development from timorous schoolgirl to tyrannical model, but due to the large time gap we don't really get to see that development in action; she just jumps from one stock personality to the other between scenes. Hints of her later nature during the earlier scenes, or vice versa, would have been fun and lent her some depth - I did wonder if you were going for something along those lines as she seemed to become more shy and sheepish again when Ashley visited her at the end, as though some measure of her earlier personality was shining through, but I wasn't sure how intentional that was.

All in all the story was really enjoyable, especially when it began to pick up speed a third of the way in. It's really just the first section that needs attention in my opinion, suffering from a fair amount of slow exposition that doesn't do much to get the reader hooked. I can imagine some readers giving up after the first few pages - which would be a damnable shame, since the story as a whole is very enjoyable.
https://www.deviantart.com/caker19

Any feedback on my stuff would be appreciated


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Looking for favorite story Anonymous 07/22/2018 (Sun) 05:30:44 No. 2880 [Reply]
The story is about a soon-to-be consort for a prince of a large kingdom, where all the consorts get as fat as possible before they are weighed on a giant scale in order from lightest to heaviest and presented to the royal court in a public ceremony. Every consort has a sort of servant who feeds and encourages her for this purpose. There is a bunch of feeding and weight gain for the earlier portion of the story and then when it comes time for the ceremony, the author notes specifically how many men are needed to transport each extremely fat woman. When the main character comes out at the end, revealed to be the fattest, the prince is delighted, and her weight is so tremendous that it breaks the scale completely. I think her weight was indicated to be a little over 200,000 pounds.

It used to be on deviantArt I think, but I've looked for it for certainly more than 10 hours now and I'm nearly certain it's no longer on the site.

I'd appreciate ANY more info, no matter how trivial! I might still be able to find it in the source code of a wayback machine cache or something if I can get some more information.

Help me bbw-chan; you're my only hope!

Racking my mind for a "lost" story drano 07/17/2018 (Tue) 22:25:26 No. 2869 [Reply]
All I can remember is that the story is about a guy who has to go to a training seminar for computers (or maybe its a telemarketing company), and the teacher is this fat gutted girl who ends up going out to eat with him a bunch.
I have combed through dimensions, FF and curvage looking for this story (which I read within the last year) and can't find it.

Kinda making me insane not being able to locate it most likely because I don't know the title.

Any titles of what I might be looking for would be appreciated.
thanks yall.
The closest thing I can think of is "The Trainer" by Uncle Jack

https://www.dimensionsmagazine.com/threads/the-trainer-by-uncle-jack-bbw-wg.87755/
>>2870
oh shit, that's it!
I must have passed over that story fifty times speed reading through collections.

posting some new luna (I believe, as I got these from the main vein)
to show my tremendous appreciation for the prompt service.
https://mab.to/uHWahuC60
>>2871
So, how's the download? Is it good stuff?
>>2874

I did. While I'm more of a pear/bottom heavy person, I do appreciate your kindness.

i write stories for money devilchild/caveman 07/20/2018 (Fri) 01:05:07 No. 2875 [Reply]
i need money for bills and could use the extra income so i am opening commissions again. if you would like a commission please message me with full details on what you would like. must be left in a note. the prices are set at 5$/page starting. i will negotiate prices for longer commissions. what i wont write about is scat, water sports, nothing other then basic/most common type of furry, gore, sex, and m/m stuff. if theres not something listed here and your unsure about just ask first and i'll get back to asap. i'm currently working a full time gig so my free time is limited but you'll get what you asked for if accepted. pm me.

my links
https://aryion.com/g4/user/caveman
https://www.deviantart.com/devilchild19128

Getting Fat Together Anonymous 07/02/2018 (Mon) 20:43:07 No. 2811 [Reply]
Damn. My thread got lost in the chaos.
Oh well, I just post it again.
I'm looking for stories that feature a group of girls gaining. Whether it be two or more friends gaining together, sisters gaining from "a curse" ?, or frenemies trying to fatten each other all are welcome. Crossing my fingers that there isn't too much overlap with the other threads I made (that would be redundant and annoying).

Anyway, let's get started.

Alice by mcoddles: An obvious one, a chubby cheerleader and her "friends" lose control of their appetites and gaining. I personally could never get into this one, but its worth the read if you have the time:https://www.deviantart.com/mcoddles/art/Alice-36316854

Exchange Students: France by bananasplitrevolt. About a french girl who moves in with a texan family. Her stay with them takes quite the toll on her figure and on those around her: https://www.deviantart.com/bananasplitrevolt/art/Exchange-Students-France-pt-1-163939780

A Southern Story by bob123456789123. I his words "Pure monologues from the perspectives of a set of growing sisters, all with different body shapes, and their thoughts on the enlargement of the town's female population. Gossip galore. Very character based." The link provided is to the file Bob has them in, but there might be one or two missing. Just look around his Deviantart page and you'll find them: https://www.deviantart.com/bob123456789123/gallery/34295554/A-Southern-Story

Lizzie by stuffer-chick-19. While working at an Indian restaurant, Lizzie and her friend Jenna start to pack on the pounds: https://www.deviantart.com/stuffer-chick-19/gallery/27864078/Lizzie

Beach Food and Beach Bodies another one by bob123456789123. In his words "story about a couple of girls who meet selling food on the beach": https://www.deviantart.com/bob123456789123/gallery/56126502/Beach-Food-and-Beach-Bodies

If fact, just to save myself time, I'll just recommend reading anything from bob123456789123 as a good couple of them tend to meet the above criteria: https://www.deviantart.com/bob123456789123/gallery/

Fattened Faculty by ChubbaDubDub. Welcome to Beaumont High, where the students aren't the only ones with a weight problem. Still ongoing: https://www.deviantart.com/chubbadubdub/gallery/62054349/Fattened-Faculty

The Piercing that Sparked Revenge by firewarrior121. After being humiliated for gaining a little weight, Ruby plots to fatten her roomate Georgia. Even if it comes at the cost of her already bloated waistline: https://www.deviantart.com/firewarrior121/art/The-Piercing-that-Sparked-Revenge-Chapter-1-701365150

Melissa by Billiyjoe. The story centers around a young lady puts a little too much stock in her metabolism and pays for it. You can tell Billiyjoe was inspired by mcoddles in having that both this and the tie-in story (Ashly, Ashlee, something along those lines) features a protagonist who has an unrealistic denial problem. Though I like this one, it doesn't really have a sense of time which can make it a confusing read. Also, just as a waring, this was posted on the Dimensions Forum which recently had a bit of a revamp. Unfortunately, this resulted in none of the old links working and the search engine begin crap. if you want to read the whole story, you'll need to go looking: https://www.dimensionsmagazine.com/threads/melissa-part-1-by-billiyjoe-bbw-eating-swg-stuckage.9049/

Amber and Carolyn by The Observer. While Amber starts to grow into her new desk job, her sister and her friends start try to see who can gain the most. https://www.dimensionsmagazine.com/threads/amber-and-carolyn-chap-1-2-by-the-observer-bbw-multiple-eating-mwg.7907/

Changing Habits by Staolea. Jess learns big things from her roomies self-confidence. I altered the original description a little. https://www.dimensionsmagazine.com/threads/changing-habits-pt-1-14-by-staolea-bbw-eating-imagery-friendship-swg.43692/

Family Curse by 333Blebleble333. A young woman decides to accept her fate as her family curse "consumes" her. Currently a two parter. not sure if there will be more, but I doubt it: part 1 https://www.deviantart.com/333blebleble333/art/Family-Curse-730791971 and part 2 https://www.deviantart.com/333blebleble333/art/Family-Curse-II-752297838

The Epsilon Experience by The-Id. Carly and her friends join a sorority that has big things in store for them. https://www.deviantart.com/the-id/art/The-Epsilon-Experience-1-157597468

And I think I'll leave it at that for now. Can't wait to see what people come up with. Just one caveat: don't post anything from writing.com. Although there are some good interactive stories there, the way the site is being handled makes it impossible to actually use.

Anyway, hope you enjoy what i have to offer and thanks in advance.
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>>2844
Op here.

I, for one, liked it. after reading a southern story (which I also liked), it was just what I needed. I don't really see how the story can move forward though seeing how the two pov pov characters have hit the immobility point (well, the progonist in the second one hasn't, but the way the story ends it's implied that it will happen).

Than again, just from typing out this response I can actually see the story going two ways: by following one of the older sisters next which for me isn't as fun since they're already so big. I like to read about the progress of a character''s weight gain. The author could also choose to follow a cousin or an aunt. I'm assuming that the "curse" is a genetic thing, and since the story hasn't mentioned (nor need to mention) where this particular set of fattening genes came from, this cures could have been going on for several generation.

that's my input anyway.
>>2845
Have you read the third part yet?

I have to say I do see the issue that past certain point it seems rather pointless whether they gain more weight or not…
I think I'll mostly stick to already presented characters.

Thanks for the feedback
Im actually doing the coloring for bulking up steph you guys have any critiques for my coloring?
>>2864
Cool. I don't care.

This thread is dedicated to a topic, and as far as I can tell this story has nothing to do with it.

Either post something relevant or don't post at all.

Anonymous 07/03/2018 (Tue) 05:59:52 No. 2816 [Reply]
It started off pretty shaky. We agreed to meet at 1pm at a local restaurant. I arrived right at 1 and took a seat at the bar. She texted that she was running late late, and she would be there at 1:15. But then 1:15 comes and goes. I text her that I ordered some food for us, thinking that food would get her to the restaurant faster.

She texted a little later that she was 5 minutes away. Then, that five minutes passed. I texted again saying the food was getting cold. No response. So then I wait some more. Finally, she walks in the door, about 45 minutes late. I had to wonder what she would have done if I was that late. But anyway…

She walks in looking just like a church lady; dark blue polyester skirt suit, black low-heel pumps, hair tied back in a bun, patent leather purse, gold cross necklace. She was short, fat, and wide, definitely a BBW. I couldn't make out much of her figure, but she was giving her polyester skirt a tight stretch across her hips. I was hoping she was a pear.

After she arrived we moved to a booth where we could chat privately. I got a brief thrill watching her shift and and slide her wide hips into the booth. And while we chatted I could see part of her bra strap peeking out from under her blouse. It was just a black silky ribbon, and it was sitting at an odd angle. I noticed it, but at the time I didn't think anything of it.

After about half an hour of a nice "getting to know each other" talk, she asked what was next on my agenda. And so I asked what was next on hers. We went back and forth like that a few times. She just wanted me to make the first move, so I said I have something on the agenda, but I can’t do it unless she joins me in doing it. And so "I" decided to get a motel room.

I gave her the address and paid the bill. We hugged our goodbyes, and I left for the motel first. She followed after she packed up the food. I got there in about half an hour. I even had time to get condoms and a Red Bull at a convenience store along the way.

But again, she took her sweet time. I almost thought she was going to flake. So a half an hour after I had gotten the room, which was an hour after I left the restaurant, she texts me to ask the room number, and I give it to her. Peeking out the window I see her car moving from parking space to parking space (trying to hide it from street view I guess).

Another 15 minutes later (and almost two hours after I got to the restaurant), she finally knocks on the door. I let her in, closed the door behind her, and greeted her with another hug. This time I groped her fat ass a little. And wow, she had a nice squishy ass!

But right away, she said she needed to go to the bathroom. And again, she took a long time in the bathroom too. At that point I was pretty annoyed with her. I just laid on the bed, and turned on the TV, not expecting anything to happen. I was thinking she was going to chicken out, or try to convert me, or whatever. She was a church official, after all.

But when she finally came out, WOW! She had packed her street clothes away, and came out wearing a black lace see-thru robe, with a black lace see-thru crotchless teddy underneath. And I also noticed her bra straps too. The same black ribbon bra straps that I saw in the restaurant were the shoulder straps of her crotchless teddy. She was already dressed to fuck back in the restaurant!

She smiled and turned around to model it for me. In back, there were two more black ribbons stretching out from her crotch, up and around her wide ass cheeks, and up over her hips. This outfit had no panties. And I wondered if she was wearing any in the restaurant. I never would have guessed by how she dressed.

I couldn’t keep my hands off of her. I reached out and just kept rubbing and squeezing her wide bare ass, and she smiled and giggled while I did it. Her lace robe came off quickly. It was getting in our way.

Her ass cheeks were round and dimpled with cellulite. I slowly worked my fingers down between her cheeks and thighs, and soon reached her pussy. Her pussy was so slippery wet. My fingers sloshed in and out, hitting her g-spot and tickling her clit. And she bent over and sat her full weight down on my hand, giggling and moaning, and wanting more.

So I decided to test the boundaries. After making her come a couple times, I put one slippery wet finger against her ass hole. She kept smiling and giggling. I pressed it into her ass hole, and she still kept smiling. My finger made it all the way in, and that made her groan, but she never stopped me. She was sitting her full weight on my hand, and I had one finger in her pussy and one in her ass. And she was panting, and giggling, and grinding her huge heavy ass down against my hand.

Then after one more little orgasm she got up and laid back on the bed. She whispered “lick my pussy”. I caressed her inner thighs down to her pussy, and gently pulled her lips apart. She had stubble down there, but she kept herself very clean…and tasty too somehow. And her pussy was still wet too. But there was so little room between her thighs I couldn’t lick her pussy and breathe at the same time. I had to stop every few seconds to breathe. I maybe made her come once.

So I climbed on top of her missionary style. She spread her legs wide, and lifted one leg up over my shoulder. The first plunge into her pussy was just a feeling of warmth, and wetness. There was no friction, no resistence, no awkwardness at all. She just let out a long groan, followed by a sexy giggle.

I bought condoms, and I was ready to use them. But we both went with the mood. I know it was dangerous. But I figured she was a church woman, so there was nothing to worry about. And she didn’t say anything about not using them either.

I knew I was fucking her, because her pussy was squishing every time I stroked her, and she was twisting and cumming underneath me. But her pussy was so wet and slippery that it was hard to feel anything from her. Her pussy was so wet that there was no friction against my cock. I don't know how many times she came. Neither of us were counting though.

Then we switched to doggy style.

She bent over, put her head all the way down on the bed, and stuck her ass way back at me. I slid right into her pussy, again no friction. Her wide ass wobbled and bobbled every time I slammed my cock deep into her. And she just kept moaning and cumming over and over.

Her pussy was super wet and slippery. I kept trying not to come. And I did a good job of it for a while. But when I knew I couldn’t hold it anymore, I pulled out and squirted big wad of cum right onto her ass cheek, another on her leg, and another one on the floor. It was one of the biggest and best cum squirts I'd had in a long while.

She collapsed down on the bed, and I cleaned up in the bathroom. I didn't think I took that long at all. But when I came out, she had already cleaned up the cum off of herself (and the floor). I got back behind her again. I was semi-hard at that point. But her wet pussy got me hard again.

Her pussy was so wet, and she was even squirting too. So once again I decided to take it even further. She let my finger in her ass hole earlier, so I pulled out and rubbed my cock against her ass hole. She didn’t jump away, or move, or anything. So I pressed my dick against her ass hole, and slowly pushed it in. I let her ass ease on to it. And after about three or four minutes or so, she had all of my cock deep in her ass.

And I stayed in her ass, pumping it in and out. She loved it! She was actually squirting and coming with my dick in her ass. She kept squirting over and over too, and each squirt lubed up her ass, letting me pump her ass deeper, and longer.

I must have taken half an hour pumping in and out ofher ass hole. She would squeeze her sphincter around my cock, and her pussy would squirt and lube her crotch and ass hole up, and I could pump her ass for a little bit longer. We kept that rhythm up for as long as I could take it.

I had already come, so I kept fucking her in her ass until I just tired myself out. When I did I just pulled out of her ass and let her flop onto the bed. She had made a huge mess all over the bed sheets. Her squirts had soaked through to the mattress. And most of her makeup had rubbed off, with her face down against the sheets.

Then she went into the bathroom, taking a long time in there again. But this time I didn’t mind. After she came out she laid down next to me, smiling and moaning “mmmph, mmmph” as she caught her breath. I didn’t want to hug her or touch her, because after all my hands had been all up in her crotch and ass hole.

After she came out I went in to take a shower. I had to, since I had the smell of her pussy, ass, and perfume all over me. When I came out she was already dressed. I gave her ass another hug and squeeze, and felt up her breasts. Her nipples were hard and sticking out. And she was leaving without wearing a bra.

After I got dressed and sat down on the bed, I gave her thighs a caress, working my way up to her ass and pussy again. It turned out she was leaving without any underwear on, not even her teddy. I thought that was sexy. And I worked my finger up in to her pussy for one last "dip", and give her one last come. But that last one was all she could handle, pushing my hand away.

So I put her skirt back down. Then she gathered her things and she left. I gathered my things and left a few minutes later. I waved at her as I left and walked to my car, and that was it.

And we're now making plans to do it again.
this is great, there's not nearly enough hardcore sex in fat fiction

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Immobility OP 07/04/2018 (Wed) 20:35:38 No. 2831 [Reply]
Immobility thread? Stories for immobility, blob, and helplessness. (Slob is allowed)
They do not have to be total immobile but at least has trouble or needs help because of their weight.

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